The Boy Who Kissed My Hand: A Monologue

by Warrior Princess

Published September 19, 2010

Stella is a sixteen-year-old girl who has just returned from a football game. She starts out writing the story in her diary, but eventually gets caught up in her own excitement and narrates it out loud.

[At the beginning of the scene, Stella is sitting on the bed with her legs curled to the side and her diary spread out before her. Her pencil scratches busily on the paper.]

STELLA: The funny thing about school is, you meet some of the most interesting people not during the classes, but at the football games. (She pauses and looks up, as if considering her words, then resumes writing, talking to herself.) I mean, the most wonderful assortment of people assemble at football games; have you ever thought about it? Otherwise, why would anyone go? Obviously bone-crushing sports aren't my cup of tea, but of course I went anyway, first of all because I have no life, and secondly because they can be entertaining sometimes. Like tonight. Tonight . . . (her hand slows, then stops) . . . I met this boy. Of course I've met tons of boys in my lifetime, but this one was . . . well . . . different? I guess? That's a pretty generic term, but it's all I can think of at this exact moment. Different . . . (her pencil traces absently over the paper) . . . but in a good way; I mean he didn't, like, dress all goth or have pink hair or stalk me all over the place or anything.

Well so I'm just sitting there in the stands by myself, kind of sad and everything because I was thinking about how Brad dumped me twice in this same exact stadium, and how now he's gone again. Third time's the charm, right? So occasionally I'd look up at the half moon and I must've presented a pretty forlorn picture because all of a sudden this guy just appears out of nowhere and sits right down next to me. (She sits up straight and glances over to her right, as if re-enacting the scene.) He said, "You look like probably the loneliest person in this stadium," and I was, you know, but I couldn't admit it, so I said, "Well . . . maybe the second loneliest?" And then he laughed and smiled at me. And oh, he had the most amazing smile! He looked exactly like a movie star: longish blond hair, blue eyes, about 6'1" I guess, and oh my goodness, that smile. Fortunately, I am not at all like those girls in movies who just lose all the vocabulary they've accumulated since they were two just because some hunk smiles at them. (She folds her hands primly in her lap.) No, I was very calm, cool, and collected; I talked and bantered and laughed delicately, which is actually very hard to do when you consider laughter often causes you to spit on people by accident.

He said his name was James. We talked about art class and junior-senior war and he made fun of me for having been homeschooled prior to this year. "That must be why you're so socially awkward," he said charmingly. At one point he asked if he could kiss my hand. "Because then you'll always remember me," he said, and his eyes were so blue when he said it, I think I probably would've consented to pull down the moon for him if he'd asked me to. So I held out my hand . . . like this . . . (she extends her right arm, hand poised gracefully) . . . and he pressed his lips against it, and they were so warm. I must have blushed terribly, but he just smiled again and said "There. Now you'll always remember me. I'll always be the boy who kissed your hand." (She holds her right hand to her chest and strokes it gently with her left.) The boy who kissed my hand.

After that, I went outside the stadium with him; we ran over to the middle school and snuck into the locker room through a window. He jumped down to the floor, then I jumped and he caught me. He caught me and for a moment he actually held me bodily in his arms, and if I had died right then I think I would've died happy because it was so wonderful. We ran down a couple of hallways, and I laughed the entire time. He must have thought I was crazy, but I'm just not used to doing crazy things, and having that much fun. Besides, he laughed too. Then we climbed back out and went back to the stadium, and sat down where we had been and continued talking as if nothing had happened. He gave me his phone number and I gave him mine, and right before I left, he held out his arms. "Can I have a hug before you go?" he asked, and oh, but he could really pull off the puppy-dog eyes. I hugged him, and he held me close to him for longer than I thought he would. (She wraps her arms around herself.) I never wanted it to end. I guess we couldn't go through life stuck together like that, and the only other alternative would be to die in each other's arms like people in old tragedies; but obviously neither of those would have worked, so I had to let go. Or maybe it was him that let go. I really don't know; all I know is that he smiled at me one more time and said, "It was nice meeting you, Stella. I'll call you tomorrow, okay?" Oh yes, I thought. Please, please, please. I smiled back and said "Okay. Talk to you tomorrow," as I was walking away, though what I really wanted to do more than anything else was run back to him and kiss him.

But perhaps that will come. Oh, I hope so. He's going to call me tomorrow. (Her voice grows fainter as she continues talking.) Please don't forget. Please don't. (She looks up at some indefinite point in the distance.) I'll be waiting for you, James. (Almost unconsciously, she carresses her right hand again, her voice barely above a whisper.) The boy who kissed my hand. . . .

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NLPrincess13
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NLPrincess13 wrote a review Review · Apr 22, 2011

i want to be Stella, please.....................Please, please!!! :D
i love it adore it, amazing! :D:D:D:D
Keep up, write to us more :D:D

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BrooklynWriter
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BrooklynWriter commented Comment · Apr 7, 2011

OMG I can't believe I haven't reviewed this yet! I've read it like five times. I looooooove it!

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Sunshine
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Sunshine commented Comment · Jan 16, 2011

I like this! This is really cool. I think you've inspired me. *Goes off to jot stuff in her notebook.*

xwritingprincess21x commented Comment · Dec 24, 2010

I really liked this. The emotions were good and intense. Good job!

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Raaayna808
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Raaayna808 wrote a review Review · Dec 21, 2010

All i can say is...
wow!
I actually pictured myself as the girl...
I'm thinking i should memorize this and do it as an audition!
I think i'd totally kick butt!
I LOVED THIS MONOLOGUE!
Keep writing yeah? :)

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broadwaystar commented Comment · Dec 16, 2010

Wow. Great emotion and feeling. This was concluded in a great style and it stayed relevantly to the point. Great job. Keep it up.
-Macy Sene'e

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skebe
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skebe wrote a review Review · Dec 15, 2010

KOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOL
Why do I get the feeling it's the script for a play?! He he. LOL!
I really liked it and I think you are awsome. :D

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AdamBH
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AdamBH wrote a review Review · Nov 21, 2010

This is very sweet, and smart too! I think it's amazing how you took such a cliché scenario and turned it into a very deep and meaningful monologue where we actually discover more about the character than about the boy about whom she is talking. I want to go into playwriting at some point and I can only aspire to be this good!

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Jas
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Jas wrote a review Review · Oct 21, 2010

I just read it and am amazed at your awesomeness. Like honestly. I think that at parts this was a little awkward but obviously, it's a monologue and reading it aloud a bunch of times will get rid of that. I was wondering, can I use this at my audition for the school play? It would be an honor to perform it and I'll be sure to give the credit to you :) It's alright if you say no :)

~Jas

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Nephthys wrote a review Review · Sep 20, 2010

Hi, I'm Nephthys, and I will be reviewing your lovely monologue today.

Warrior Princess wrote:STELLA: The funny thing about school is, you meet some of the most interesting people. N not at the school, but at the football games.

Don't the football games take place at the school? Instead of saying "not at the school" maybe try "not during classes".

Warrior Princess wrote:(She pauses and looks up, as if considering her words, then resumes writing, talking to herself.)

In my opinion, this seems like too much direction. As an actor, I always find it irritating when the writer gives too many specific instructions. Since the pause there is not necessary to make the story make sense, and will probably be instinctively added by the actor anyway, I would suggest taking it out.
Warrior Princess wrote:I mean,

Try to avoid using "I mean". It makes your character seem less interesting since it is a very overused phrase in teen monologues.
Warrior Princess wrote:the most wonderful assortment of people assemble at football games; have you ever thought about it? Otherwise, why would anyone go?

This seems odd to me. In my experience most people go to watch the game...

Warrior Princess wrote: So occasionally I'd look up at the half moon and I must've presented a pretty forlorn picture

This sentence seems to be written in a much higher level of diction than the rest of the monologue.

Warrior Princess wrote:Fortunately, I am not at all like those girls in movies who just lose all the vocabulary they've accumulated since they were two just because some hunk smiles at them.

Nice sentence :)
Warrior Princess wrote: I think I probably would've consented to pull down the moon for him if he'd asked me to.

Awkwardly phrased. "Consented" just doesn't seem to fit.

Warrior Princess wrote:and for a moment heactuallyheld me bodilyin his arms,

I'm not sure that the word "bodily" works here.
Warrior Princess wrote:He must have thought I was crazy... Besides, he laughed too.

Why would she think that if he was laughing too? Maybe "I must have seemed crazy?"

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Very nice. There were some really great sentences! I liked that the monologue had a flow to it, as often monologues on this site are written as a general whine with no changes in tone.

I would suggest taking a look back over it and seeing if you can make the language a little more consistent. For most of the monologue, Stella sounds like a typical teenager, and then she will suddenly say something very formal. I would suggest going with the formal bit, because I think it makes the monologue more interesting.

Hope this was helpful!

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wonderland
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wonderland commented Comment · Sep 19, 2010

This kicks my monologue down the stairs.
I'm serious. Yours is that good. your emotion is great, your description is spot on.
Oh, I'm jealous. I wish I had skills like that.
Keep it up
~WickedWonder



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